the dialogue and voice are intriguing, but i can't get a sense of the story in this. it's a short excerpt. . .next time you should post a longer one. over all though it was interesting to read and i would read more.
Agreed! Wish I knew this was up sooner. wasn't expecting a teaser. so, um this Karev character has me thinking, "oh yes. hot and mysterious teacher man, come my way. now!"
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You should've posted the "Romeo" joke part in the first page. That was hysterical. . .Even though someone dies at the end of the chapter. *sighs*
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ha. . .I didn't think of it! I tried to throw a scene up quick because unfortunately I have to go prepare for a drug smuggling test tomorrow. . .
the dialogue and voice are intriguing, but i can't get a sense of the story in this. it's a short excerpt. . .next time you should post a longer one. over all though it was interesting to read and i would read more.
Agreed! Wish I knew this was up sooner. wasn't expecting a teaser. so, um this Karev character has me thinking, "oh yes. hot and mysterious teacher man, come my way. now!"
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